Casting Bricks to Attract Jade
16December 16, 2017 by petrujviljoen
Step! Two, three and again
step two! Now – turn around
and
voice receding –
centrifugal distant tracking
rhythm raises
drum beat
light deepening
………………..
A quadrille, a poem of 44 words exactly – introduced by Bjorn Rudberg at Dverse Poets.
The first 22 words, posted here, to be completed by whosoever takes up this challenge with another 22. I noticed other poets using space as punctuation and tried it – once. Whosoever takes up this challenge can punctuate as they like.
This for Jilly’s Casting Bricks to Attract Jade December Challenge.
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I completed your challenge! https://lifeinportofino.wordpress.com/2017/12/19/creationdance/
Hope it’s okay.
[…] fun! This is my completion of Petru J. Viljoen’s challenge half-quadrille. She submitted this as part of Jilly’s December Casting Bricks Challenge. (Or possibly […]
I’m not sure if I followed correctly, but for you… I tried, here is my addition to your piece.
II
In the clearing
Of the forest
Woodpecker drummer
Bare feet, toe trip, twirl
Verdant moss, pine,
Shamrocks…
Rocking, celadon –
The hunter bows
©JP/dh
(verdant, moss, pine, shamrocks, celadon – all shades of green)
Beautiful Jules!
😀
Oh my, but I loved completing this. It made for a wonderful Monday morning. Hope you enjoy!
https://jillys2016.wordpress.com/2017/12/18/turning-an-artists-challenge/
Hopping over.
[…] Petru’s Challenge poem for December Casting Bricks (collaborative poetry) proved to be an immense delight! A deep fog […]
Hi Petru! I’ve taken up the challenge and completed it on Jilly’s site. Quite a steep challenge, too!
Oh fantastic. Off to read it now.
Hope you’re not too horrified!
love it!
Wanna play? Follow the guide at the bottom and the link to Jilly’s blog.
Lots of good possibilities here. Pondering…
Ooo- love this! Will take up the challenge. Glad you’ve joined in!
Looking forward!