Tanka

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December 10, 2017 by petrujviljoen

cup tilts, spills,
shatters on the kitchen floor
– absence expanding

summer’s ever green resumes
its whispers beneath the breeze


Linked to Frank J Tassone’s haikai challenge

Linked to Open Link Night – Dverse Poets.

 

41 thoughts on “Tanka

  1. merrildsmith says:

    I liked “– absence expanding,” and it was a nice turn in the tanka.

  2. divalounger says:

    I like the feel of this–a moment captured–and filled with serenity

  3. Sabio Lantz says:

    Loved the contrasting images — creative use of expanding emptiness. Glass half empty?

  4. jazzytower says:

    Ah, a nice turn with that 3rd line. Nicely done.

  5. mhmp77 says:

    kaykuala

    Nicely written, Petru!

    Hank

  6. julespaige says:

    This reminds me of being so caught up in either a memory or a vision that when there is a disruption, as the phone or door bell ringing that the cup in one’s hand can easily slip.

    • I had that with a pot of paint. Luckily the container was plastic and the paint that flew all over the floor got picked up and reused. It wasn’t green, it was purple! There’s still an attractive stain on the floor and I think I’ll keep it. 🙂

  7. I, too, was caught by “absence expanding” and how those words magnified meaning within your piece. Well done!

  8. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like the evergreen resuming after the shattered cup.

  9. Beautifully concise and subtly profound.

  10. hypercryptical says:

    The cup shatters, the absence/silence expands and summer resumes its whispers and life goes on.
    So much more in your words.
    Merry Christmas Petru!
    Anna :o]

  11. ‘absence expanding’ takes us way beyond the tanka – a lovely write Petru :o) xxx

  12. sanaarizvi says:

    summer’s ever green resumes
    its whispers beneath the breeze

    Gorgeously written 🙂

  13. I like the contrasting moods here. Puts things into perspective.

  14. summer’s ever green resumes
    its whispers beneath the breeze

    Love these lines – really beautiful!

  15. Absense expanding… A beautiful image and concept. Well done.

  16. TeA LEaveS
    SPiLT DreAMS
    CuP
    CoMe
    BaCK
    AGaiN
    WarM FeeLS
    EssencE FuLL..:)

  17. X says:

    Damn.
    Now i need to go get more beer.
    That was the last one.

  18. Grace says:

    I like the turn of this line: – absence expanding!

    Happy Holidays and wishing you the best for 2018!

  19. scotthastiepoet says:

    In context I particularly admired the line: – absence expanding… Beautifully done…

  20. Beverly Crawford says:

    It will be an expanded absence before summer breezes resume here in my world. Frigid here today! Blessings on you and yours this holiday season.

  21. You are right these are but moments.

  22. Glenn Buttkus says:

    This tanka is rife with metaphor, philosophy and spiritual hope. Granted Winter robs us of warmth, but not the memory and dream of verdant halcyon days to come.

  23. Love the way you used the bridge between the shattered cup and how maybe you can notice nature afterwards.

  24. Trådløs says:

    The expanding absence hints to so much more than just a shattered cup

  25. Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
    #Haiku Happenings #3: Petruj’s latest #tanka for my current #haikai challenge!

  26. I like this too. Life goes on.

  27. I love “absence expanding”..

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