Mother

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May 13, 2016 by petrujviljoen

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the cool breeze
fills the empty vault of heaven
with the voice of the pine tree         © Onitsura

 

whispers of  the way it is

grew, swelled – reached humanity    © Petru J Viljoen

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Linked to Carpe Diem, the Tan Renga Challenge and to Dverse Open Link Night, hosted by Gayle Walters Rose – with reference to Mother’s Day.

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33 thoughts on “Mother

  1. Bryan Ens says:

    This is beautiful!

  2. Barry D. says:

    Oh these are lush whispers… with a twinge of loss… my mother can only speak to me via whispers from heaven’s vault… so this really hit me in my heart.

    Extremely well crafted too.

  3. Nan Mykel says:

    I’m trying t come up with one word to express the emotion behind this haiku.

  4. kanzensakura says:

    Excellent ending lines to the haiku of Onitsura. It almost always seems awkward when extra lines are added to a perfect haiku but in your case, your addition was lovely and added a great deal of meaning.

  5. Ava Hypatia says:

    Thank you for reminding me of the beauty of a well crafted haiku.

  6. Ava Hypatia says:

    Thank you for sharing your haiku and the peace it creates within this reader.

  7. Whispers within the forest walls can be so intriguing. Yes, it’ll find its way to humanity! Wonderful lines Petru!

    Hank

  8. I adore pine trees and your haiku draws them beautifully!

  9. Bodhirose says:

    “Empty vault of heaven”…hmm…mysterious and beautiful haiku. You can’t much argue with the “way it is.” Thanks for adding your voice to dVerse, Petru!
    Gayle ~

  10. PSC says:

    Oooh, I like that! The whispers of the wind through the pines… reaching humanity. Nice ‘completion’!

  11. Grace says:

    I admire the concluding line, reaching for humanity ~

  12. Waltermarks says:

    That’s very intuitive, a beautiful reflection of nature

  13. So soothing… like a cool susurration caressing the skin on a too warm day.

  14. That’s the best of whispers.

  15. humbird says:

    Cosmic approach, great!

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