The Moon – A Prosery

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February 14, 2022 by petrujviljoen

The object on the table was as she had left it. It held so much. [Potential (trouble)]. Her happiness once (she thought) depended on it. She thought she could turn it on (off), turn it (on) off, imaginings becoming strobes dizzying her so she lied down to find the silence. Once – again.
Coming to (getting up) a whole half full expectation she’d find it hung in the air, somewhere in the room. (It wasn’t.) It is. The moon – wrapped in brown paper. Still as the soft silver light at the time of the night. The pain. Soothed to stillness. The trouble [she had gone to (she had been through)], plucking her heart from her chest, dreaming the moon to give it, to it.
The effort: turning her gaze, turning to the room, turning around, searching, finding the tall glass (still) half full.

Copyright Petru J Viljoen

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35 thoughts on “The Moon – A Prosery

  1. Very layered and skilful. A delight to read.

  2. Love the style of this piece and the image of the moon wrapped in brown paper!!!

  3. There is something resembling a fever dream in all those thoughts going back and forth, and then in the end finding the half full grlass.

  4. Helen Dehner says:

    Hi there! I like all the back and forth and back agains!

  5. The different sets of brackets create layers of thoughts, sliding beneath the silvery scene. What you see, what you don’t are all there.

  6. Petru – this is ingeniously written – and I love that ending! Perfection.

    -David

  7. Gillena Cox says:

    one can feel the disorentation of this person in such a crazy state. Your emphasis, those brackets, well done.
    Thanks for dropping by to read mine
    much love…

  8. memadtwo says:

    I’m always amending my thoughts like that too. But I would never have known how to put it into words. Wonderful! (K)

  9. rothpoetry says:

    Well done! That would be unsettling to find things moved about without anyone being in the room.

  10. msjadeli says:

    Mesmerizing and disorienting at first, once she orients, all is well. Very skillfully constructed, Petru.

  11. Shawna says:

    I love like crazy what you’ve done with parentheses and brackets. Excellent.

  12. What Merril said. This is just so arresting. Your format emphasizes and adds layers to your message. Wow!

  13. calmkate says:

    absolutely delightful write, well done … those parenthesis add another dimension!

  14. I love how you’ve told this.

  15. merrildsmith says:

    This was so interesting. I like the parenthetical phrases and the shifting of time and voice.

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