The Moon – A Prosery
35February 14, 2022 by petrujviljoen
The object on the table was as she had left it. It held so much. [Potential (trouble)]. Her happiness once (she thought) depended on it. She thought she could turn it on (off), turn it (on) off, imaginings becoming strobes dizzying her so she lied down to find the silence. Once – again.
Coming to (getting up) a whole half full expectation she’d find it hung in the air, somewhere in the room. (It wasn’t.) It is. The moon – wrapped in brown paper. Still as the soft silver light at the time of the night. The pain. Soothed to stillness. The trouble [she had gone to (she had been through)], plucking her heart from her chest, dreaming the moon to give it, to it.
The effort: turning her gaze, turning to the room, turning around, searching, finding the tall glass (still) half full.
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Very layered and skilful. A delight to read.
Thank you!
Love the style of this piece and the image of the moon wrapped in brown paper!!!
Thank you Rajani!
There is something resembling a fever dream in all those thoughts going back and forth, and then in the end finding the half full grlass.
A delirium for sure.
Hi there! I like all the back and forth and back agains!
Thanks!
The different sets of brackets create layers of thoughts, sliding beneath the silvery scene. What you see, what you don’t are all there.
Glad you liked it!
I did. Slipping a line of poetry into a piece of prose is very hard to do and sound convincing. Your prose is poetical and fragmented enough to make it work.
Great. Enjoyed writing this one.
It shows 🙂
Petru – this is ingeniously written – and I love that ending! Perfection.
-David
Thank you David! Truly appreciate!
one can feel the disorentation of this person in such a crazy state. Your emphasis, those brackets, well done.
Thanks for dropping by to read mine
much love…
I’m always amending my thoughts like that too. But I would never have known how to put it into words. Wonderful! (K)
Well done! That would be unsettling to find things moved about without anyone being in the room.
She was in the room. Also, surrealism lends to the moon rising on its own volition just as if it’s real.
Very nice work!
Mesmerizing and disorienting at first, once she orients, all is well. Very skillfully constructed, Petru.
Thanks Lisa!
You’re welcome.
I love like crazy what you’ve done with parentheses and brackets. Excellent.
Thank you indeed.
What Merril said. This is just so arresting. Your format emphasizes and adds layers to your message. Wow!
Hey! Thanks Claudia!
absolutely delightful write, well done … those parenthesis add another dimension!
Thank you!
most welcome!
I love how you’ve told this.
Thank you!!
You’re welcome! 🙂
This was so interesting. I like the parenthetical phrases and the shifting of time and voice.
Thanks.