Light Writing

January 3, 2019 by petrujviljoen

light of the day and of the night

writing: keeping to the way of water

and intelligence of dreams

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Category: poetry | Tags: haiga, ink in thirds, light, micro poetry, photography, three line thursday, walking, water, words, writing

15 thoughts on “Light Writing”

Just Barry says:

January 5, 2019 at 07:52

This is a dense and profound poem. It says much with the sparse language you chose.

I love the image you used, and your use of water in the second line. Water can tickle, flow, or crash. I learned that from the great philosopher, Bruce Lee.

petrujviljoen says:

January 5, 2019 at 09:37

I’ve never thought of Bruce Lee as a philosopher but you’re the second person whom I take seriously, who has read and found value in his way of life. I will get to know more about the guy instantly. Thanks Barry.

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Jane Dougherty says:

January 4, 2019 at 11:49

I do like the mystery in this one. It takes me to a different world. Happy New Year, hoping it will be full of light and mystery.

petrujviljoen says:

January 4, 2019 at 15:32

Thanks Jane! I wish the same for you!

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- Jane Dougherty says:
  
  January 4, 2019 at 15:35
  
  🙂
  
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Jules says:

January 4, 2019 at 03:26

In the upper right… a dark shadow reminds me of a sly fox 🙂
Nice haiku.

petrujviljoen says:

January 4, 2019 at 15:31

I’ll look for the fox! They’re known to out-smart a lion in African folklore. Do you think it’s a haiku? Didn’t want to claim it as such so put micro-poetry in the tag.

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- Jules says:
  
  January 4, 2019 at 16:53
  
  Modern English Language haiku does not have to follow the 5,7,5 syllable rules.
  Each line is what can be said in a breath.
  So I believe it would be your call to categorize your verse however you like. 🙂
  
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  - petrujviljoen says:
    
    January 4, 2019 at 17:50
    
    There’s so much debate about English language haiku/senryu it’s a case of taking pot luck what one calls it I decided. I’m tired of having my head bitten off about it though. 🙂
  - Jules says:
    
    January 4, 2019 at 18:21
    
    Which is exactly why I don’t belong to persnickety haiku organizations. I write what I like. And if anyone wants to Challenger what I call my pieces – that is completely their choice 🙂
  - petrujviljoen says:
    
    January 4, 2019 at 20:11
    
    And good for you! Claudia McGill has the same approach and I’m beginning to eschew most group efforts even if some are less, much less tyrannical about the form.
  - Jules says:
    
    January 4, 2019 at 20:38
    
    Traditionalist also follow the use of kigo words and other rules. Which I don’t follow, because I write mostly for my own enjoyment and when someone else appreciates my effort – it is just an added bonus and incentive to write more of ‘my style’ 😉 I’ll have to look up Claudia.
    
    I read her about page. I think she and I, came from similar molds 😀
  - petrujviljoen says:
    
    January 5, 2019 at 09:44
    
    I love Claudia’s work! The traditionalists in haiku writing, following the 5-7-5 and kigo and cutting words misses the nuances of the English language, which is very different to Japanese. I’m yet to see a translation of Japanese haiku following the 5-7-5; it’s invariably much shorter in English so to get the essence of what is said and meant. I’ve been visiting The Haiku Foundation pages and the work presented as haiku definitely do not use only traditionalist writing. So: we’ll do what we like and if it works, good! Surely that is Zen? As you said, one writes for oneself first and if another finds value that is a good thing.