Accipitur Melanoleucus

January 20, 2018 by petrujviljoen

clean, still, beak tucked in –
hunt’s primal end – mine undone
sparrow of the hawks

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Linked to Frank J Tassone’s haikai challenge

Category: poetry | Tags: frank j tassone, haikai challenge, primal, senryu, sparrowhawk

14 thoughts on “Accipitur Melanoleucus”

Jules says:

January 31, 2018 at 18:53

…And yet I have seen smaller birds attack larger ones when protecting nests or territory.
Nature is full of life, and a balance that humans seem unable to tune into.

petrujviljoen says:

January 31, 2018 at 18:55

I’ve seen that too. It happens with other species too. And humans are stupid!

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- Jules says:
  
  January 31, 2018 at 18:57
  
  …poets excluded…?… well most of the time 😉
  
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  - petrujviljoen says:
    
    January 31, 2018 at 18:59
    
    I’d like to think at least we try?

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January 27, 2018 at 18:55

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Jane Dougherty says:

January 23, 2018 at 18:11

Nice (bit sad) word play here 🙂

petrujviljoen says:

January 23, 2018 at 18:24

It’s sad but not without expectation?

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- Jane Dougherty says:
  
  January 23, 2018 at 18:32
  
  It’s the way of all flesh. I think suffering is minimal for prey. We’re the ones who have developed the inflicting of mass suffering as a characteristic of the species.
  
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  - petrujviljoen says:
    
    January 23, 2018 at 19:55
    
    You’re making me wonder if I shouldn’t turn this into a haibun! There’s much unsaid. Hmmm … I’ll think about it.
  - Jane Dougherty says:
    
    January 23, 2018 at 21:49
    
    Don’t turn it into a haibun—write a haibun. I like the original as a haiku.
  - petrujviljoen says:
    
    January 24, 2018 at 19:15
    
    Ok.
  - Jane Dougherty says:
    
    January 24, 2018 at 19:19
    
    🙂