Untitled – A Quadrille

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January 2, 2018 by petrujviljoen

The group.
Plots, gathers, circles
the one.
Asylum seeker – nature.

A calculated malice –
an old wound, still
fresh after all
the years
– erupts.

Retreating –
away from the precipice,
the considered leap
now on grass
now
on the glass shards
of the aftermath

Arms unfolded
– flexing.

….

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15 thoughts on “Untitled – A Quadrille

  1. The contrast between landing, first on grass, then on glass shards seems to be a rather apt description of the realities of life. Somehow I sensed the contemplation of taking one’s own life.

    • It’s difficult to explain. The allusion is there but won’t be carried out. It’s just that in a state of depression one (in the old way) arrives at the thought but determinedly turns away, even distressed that the thought can still surface.

  2. Colin Lee says:

    Ominous and intriguing. You packed so much into these mere 44 words. Impressive!

  3. Mish says:

    I felt betrayal…but there is something about the “flexing” at the end, as if in mockery or bravery. Dark and mysterious.

  4. Grace says:

    Seems like the aftermath of that eruption is a fresh wound anew ~ Wishing you a happy new year !

  5. You have to be tough to keep going in this life. What a strong poem you have written and so many phrases that are straight to the point and polished. Wow!

  6. jillys2016 says:

    Ah, my friend, I feel that many readings could not fully unlcok all that is packed into these words. There is an aroma that rises from the being of this poem that has power.

  7. I have sympathy for “the one” who for so long was pushed and pushed, ganged up on and unheard. People, or nature, don’t just snap out of nowhere. There is a lot of pain — too much — that goes into those flexed arms.

  8. The pain of wounds will never really heal i think

  9. Trådløs says:

    Ugh. That is tough stuff

  10. Frank Hubeny says:

    I liked how your put these lines together: “now on grass
    now
    on the glass shards” which makes sense considering the idea of an old wound erupting.

  11. There’s a lot going on in here that we are not privy to but the story is intriguing in what it omits- the details, the cause of the pain. A brave reach into raw territory!

  12. MarinaSofia says:

    Ouch – if I read this one correctly, it is incredibly dark and bitter!

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