Arid – Frank J Tassone’s haikai challenge
24December 4, 2017 by petrujviljoen
cool, distilled water
– parched –
took a bite from a cloud
………
Linked to Frank J Tassone’s Haikai challenge
December 4, 2017 by petrujviljoen
cool, distilled water
– parched –
took a bite from a cloud
………
Linked to Frank J Tassone’s Haikai challenge
[…] Petrujviljoen: Arid […]
You are brilliant
This reminds me of a recent drive through mountains where the clouds looked like caps on the pines. I can imagine small animals not having to descend to the ground having enough to drink from the air … lovely.
I book marked Frank J T’s site, is that a weekly prompt on Sunday?
Yes, it is. Have a look-see at the other’s contributions, there’s beautiful work!
I did poke around – Very nice place.
Too many prompt sites – not enough time… but one can try 😉
🙂
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#Haiku Happenings #2: Petruj’s latest haiku for my current #haikai challenge!
I’m looking out at the low grey cloud and thinking—I’d have to be really desperate to take a bite out of that! I bet your clouds are lovely and white and fluffy. Very effective haiku!
Thanks Jane. This was from a note I made while stilling in the big, bad old city – so no wonder. I wouldn’t need to do that now. Now there’s water everywhere in streams and rivers and rock pools and our tap water is pumped straight from the stream, so that’s good.
It’s the clean, sharp things that we miss in the city, I think. Everything has an antiseptic veneer, but underneath, there’s something dusty and murky about everything, even the tap water.
concrete, traffic, people, noise!
Right.
I’m due a visit to your blog. I want to read the Yeats month and the other stuff you’ve been doing. ‘See’ you soon!
You’re in for a heavy reading session!
Yeats! I mean – yeah!
🙂
“took a bite from a cloud” Now THAT is arid! A worth haiku!
Thanks!
I can taste that cool drink. Beautiful.
Thanks!
Took me by suprise! LOVE, LOVE this!
Thanks Jilly!
I love the last line! It’s so vivid and creative.
Thank you!