Never – Again
17November 10, 2017 by petrujviljoen
It’s never about birds in poetry;
it is about our inadequate,
marrow-filled bones that
weigh us down
reminding us of the immediacy
of the dust.
It’s never about stars in poetry;
It’s about the daily rasure of dreams
in endless existence, clawing,
groping around in the calamitous gutter
for more … of the same
desolation …
It’s never about eternity.
(edited at 12:21 – last word poetry to eternity)
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For Casting Bricks – Jilly’s Challenge. Please visit the page and follow the Mr Linky – there’s some great writing!
petrujviljoen 
I love the twist in this poem as mostly we humans have our concerns uppermost.
Absolutely love this! It’s never about birds…bravo. 😉
I think WP is having a burp. Comments are landing in the spam folders. Saw this only now — Thanks!
Oh dear. Let’s give WordPress a mint or some tea. I lose comments sometimes too and can’t get pages to refresh in my followed sites. I start thinking everyone has stopped writing and then boom! I’ve got lots of reading to catch up on haha.
WP should get commented on – sweetened with a mint. Ha!
This is one of your best… love it.
Thanks! It’s a collaboration you realise? Between Jilly’s2016 and myself. The italics is mine, above that hers.
I know but it worked perfectly
Well, this just clatters down the staircase of despair and into the cellar of nihilism with a big crash and a bang. It’s like drinking a triple espresso in a fairground in the rain.
Glad to hear that – means a job well done!
I love how bleak these second halves of this poem are turning out to be. Nicely done!
Only Revivedwriter did a positivie, hopeful take on Jilly’s challenge. Good for her!
I *love* “rasure of dreams”!
Truth to one is a variation of the same to another.
Is there one truth, only one bird, one star or one poem?
And sometimes it is all about gremlins…
If you can’t post a comment… you can send me an email.
If you want I can put your comment in for you.
Truth is the stairs in an Escher painting that lead everywhere and while going no where.
http://www.mcescher.com/gallery/back-in-holland/relativity/
Ha-ha-ha!! I’ll email as well.
When I got to the last line I went, ‘Wait! What?’ Oh, you are good! This just stopped me short; so much truth. Thank you for completing this challenge with such elequence, Petru.
Thanks jilly! Uhm, not sure if you saw the edit? poetry became eternity.