Whosoever drinketh – Charley/Petru Challenge


November 5, 2017 by petrujviljoen

[Here comes she, bearing her plight.]

(A man!  Will his words carry sugar
as does all the rest?)

[She suffers more than she needs.
Her exclusion from the throng

her own guilt]

(A Jew!  Why is he waiting here,
and at this hour?)

[Her heart remains open – Thank
you, Father!]

(I cannot face him.  He must know
that I am an outcast.  Perhaps
if I ignore him.)

[She cannot know that I am here
to bring her back into the world
of the living.]

(Maybe he will ignore me.)

“Will you give me some water?”

‘’Will you give me some water?’’

(A woman, mocking. Me!)

[He’s waiting. He chose the well,

a woman’s place. He does not (yet)

know I’m a Sibyl, taught by the

Matriarchs who came before me.

He’s here for what I can give him.]

(I’m in danger. And

the disciples bore me. That look of

compassion … half a smile.

An intellect … She knows!)

[We share a father, Israel, a mother also,

Ethiopa. The ones whose well I (we) use. He has

need, his heart will open.]

(A Samaritan!

Honour, respect … I listened.)

[He will suffer much. His ambition will be

his exclusion. Consolation won’t suffice

here. Yes, in answer, husbands I’ve had,

many. Bah! I can’t be ruled.]

(I expected consolation, even memory

and got philosophy. Here are the

disciples …)

[I’ll leave the water jug. They can draw

water for themselves. Ignorants! I’ll

draw from Life when I need again.]

(I have to go. I have a cross to bear.)

[I am]

(I am)

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Jilly – Casting Bricks to Attract Jade – a platform for poetic challenges. And Challenges. I met this one.

15 thoughts on “Whosoever drinketh – Charley/Petru Challenge

  1. I love that line ‘I have to go, I have a cross to bear.’ Killer.

  2. jillys2016 says:

    Unique take on this scene, Petru. I am most taken with her understanding of what is his future just as he had knowledge of her past and the two closing lines, of course. This is a tough challenge and you met it well. (I’ve written mine, but not posted just yet.)

  3. Charley says:

    Worthy, worthy poem! Bravo! You captured the tone and turned the corner (tables) neatly! You also captured two voices that speak brilliantly. Again, bravo!

    (Now, if you’d care to continue conversing theologically, contact me. Or feel free not to. No arguments, I swear… um, affirm… promise. 🙂 )

  4. jillys2016 says:

    Intentionally not reading just yet, as I am also working on this one. I’ll be back soon! Glad you are joining in, my friend!

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