Experimental haiku
40September 16, 2017 by petrujviljoen
feather
dusted sill
- blue swallow
…
unasked
uncalled for –
no. just no!
Image copyright Kristjaan Panneman
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In response to: imagination-without-limits
Having written the first, I realised the prompt so wrote a second.
Linking to Dverse Poets Open Link Night as well.
petrujviljoen 
Sharp and poignant!
Thank you!
Quite a challenge, and well met!
Thank you!
Oh, yes. I love the first one.
The first one was my first love.
I’m not familiar with experimental Haiku but as two short poems they work.
Thanks.
What we encounter leads us to saying both yes and even no to it. The no may be what gets us to act.
What insight! Thank you Frank.
feather dusted sill… love the first one!
Beautiful work(s) of art!
I love that website and it does have some very interesting prompts. Your second poem stands out very strongly…yes, I get your message loud and clear!
Thanks!
The second haiku must be the lock speaking. I like this challenge 🙂 You did it justice!
Thanks Vivian!
I too like the first haiku….Have a good weekend ~
For me the second one is strong enough to stand by itself too
Thank you! A haiku, or any poem really, ought to stand independent from a photo. Thanks again.
Excellent experimentation of haiku. You’ve just inspired me to start doing an experimentation of my own in some weird haiku’s of things. Love this a lot. 🙂
Good! Go to Carpe Diem, I’ve put the link, there’s a prompt up every day.
Is this in your site?
At the bottom – It says Imagination-Without-Limits underlined.
I’m trying to find it…can you send me a link. please. I’m so sorry.
Sure, gimme a minute
okay. 🙂
http://chevrefeuillescarpediem.blogspot.co.za/2017/09/carpe-diem-1259-creating-beauty.html
Question: In this site…do they sometimes announce a open link night where you can post whatever you like? or is it a certain specific forum of writing.
The site focus on Japanese style writing, whether haiku, haibun, tanka and so on. I’ve never seen an OLN as such but the prompts are very open to interpretation.
🙂
Yes I think it does stand very comfortably by itself. You very much have your own touch… a fresh and challenging voice, which I do admire.
Thank you!
Especially love the first… the contrast after the cutting word is great.
Thanks. I was inspired.
Like this set very much
Thanks! I didn’t post the photo of the prompt, I wanted to see if the second haiku stood on its own which I’m not sure whether it does. I’d appreciate feedback?
In a way it fits the image, but it also can stand on its own.
Thanks Kristjaan!
Great!
Thanks!