Mountain scribe

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June 13, 2017 by petrujviljoen

Cradling a mountain absurdly riddled;

a cry – the autumn wind.

Arums bloom.

 

Falling water smelt the sun and bird’s

wild song and graces of deer

and rodents while

 

jasmine’s budding; yet unseen the

air laced – briefly fragrant  –

the mýstery is patient.

 

glyphs  – heralds of the Matriarchy.

There are clouds in the pond. My hand

plunges, touches

 

the dissolving sky – scrolling ripples

brim the edge, slightly

spilling over.

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22 thoughts on “Mountain scribe

  1. Jana H White says:

    You are alive in it! Every word sings….

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  2. the dissolving sky – scrolling ripples
    brim the edge, slightly spilling over.

    How nature can turn itself into many different forms within minutes. Good observation

    Hank

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  3. “…There are clouds in the pond. My hand / plunges, touches / the dissolving sky…”. Just beautiful!

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  4. frankhubeny says:

    I like the idea of the “mystery” being “patient”. Patience and love are closely related in my view.

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  5. Glenn Buttkus says:

    So many good points already stated. Your form is like an eastern one–I even counted syllables at first–but wow–then the poem bursts through free as a spooked grouse, beating its wings like a humming bird, or a playing card in bike spokes; really wonderful. I set aside /the mystery is patient/–#4 to do so it seems.

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  6. ladynyo says:

    This is lovely, deep, patient in itself and enchanting! What a lovely poem.

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  7. The image of sky brimming over the edge as ripples is beautiful. I like the overall aesthetics of this verse.
    -HA

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  8. This has an Eastern form feel to it while still being very much free verse. I like the meditation aspect of looking at nature and realizing it is through the mirroring water. Made your text become very three dimensional. Well done.

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  9. Lovely meditation on nature and its ephemeral manifestations.

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  10. Grace says:

    A magical moment, a gift from mother nature ~ This line is lovely:

    the mýstery is patient.

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  11. Nan Mykel says:

    Oh yes, “the mystery is patient!” Truly dissolving!

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  12. Seana says:

    This is so pretty!

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  13. lynn__ says:

    I like this patient mystery and dissolving sky!

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  14. I don’t understand it, but it paints a lovely picture of budding rain clouds spilling over into rain.

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  15. Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous ❤️

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  16. Love how the sky and the water comes together in the end.

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  17. Lovely descriptive phrases take me there! Thank you.

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  18. I especially like the last stanza and how this poem builds. Such beautiful imagery.

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I make art, I read a lot and I'm now trying to write as well. Otherwise I belong to a cat by the name of Charlie that drives me nuts sometimes and other times makes me melt with love for her.

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