Call Card – Quadrille for Dverse


December 5, 2016 by petrujviljoen

Where you talked over me,

over who I was, who I meant

to be for you. And her (and her

and her).  About, behind, beyond

at times but always in absence

of I so discussed. Words I was

left  with:

calling cards

as scars


Linked to Dverse

25 thoughts on “Call Card – Quadrille for Dverse

  1. ladynyo says:

    Strong, powerful quadrille. Layered with depth and inference.

  2. By talking over you, he deprived himself of ever really seeing and appreciating you and who you could have been for each other. His loss!

  3. Bryan Ens says:

    Gossip as wounds/scars. Great metaphor!

  4. susanmehr says:

    ‘Where you talked over me’ just grabbed me in the beginning. Then the depth of the whole piece and the calling cards as scar was brilliant at the end. Well Done.

  5. thotpurge says:

    so intriguing..the calling cards as scars…

  6. I like the structure of the poem, taking the meaning to different levels.

  7. frankhubeny says:

    I liked the idea of “calling cards as scars”.

  8. Brian says:

    Don’t call us we’ll call you.

  9. lillian says:

    This is so well done. When you talked over me….and then you add the other dimensions (repetition but with different words). And then the repetition of exact words (her)….the hurt juxtaposed to the idea of a calling card. I think of those as something that one passes on cheerfully and here, it is anything but that. Well done!

  10. Grace says:

    Calling cards as scars – that ending just hit me ~ Good work with the challenge ~

  11. whimsygizmo says:

    I love the way this begins, as if part of a larger conversation…perhaps one that has only happened in the mind. 😉 LOVE scars as calling cards (and vice-versa).

  12. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    You took the prompt to a whole new level! Kudos!

  13. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    And then there’s the more ordinary sense of calling cards, as identifying or announcing someone. As you probably mean, with the scars left behind to identify that person who talked over, etc.. An arresting poem, the conclusion startling and powerful.

  14. Ah.. this is one your best.. the repetition of her and her, the calling card… very good.

  15. “Calling cards” huh? D’You know what a Calling Card is? In mafia circles? It’s a debt to be repaid. Nice one P!

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