Haibun Monday, Night Sky
30September 5, 2016 by petrujviljoen
Crickets have started. It’s still early. It’s the last half hour of day’s drama – topmost sky turns indigo, paling to soft light blue blending to pale yellow. A violet line along the deep green horizon. Valleys disappear. Orange, pink, violet wisps streak the sky. Long after the sun bid goodnight.
First star appears, brightens, throbs. More and more, a great very many more. Present to, in the night.
work of light being
handed over to the night
stardom triumphant
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I like the handing over of a shift, a watch described beautifuly.
Dramatic description of transition from day to night!
I like ‘stardom’ – a kingdom of stars. 🙂
Queendom if you please!
Sorry for the sexist remark! But maybe Queendom isn’t PC either. Reigndom? A reigndom of stars. Sounds like bad weather though. 🙂
I like reigndom … 🙂
Yes, I like it, too. It invites an image of stars raining down, like ‘star sparks’ – celebratory fireworks.
Very beautiful imagery. I love the crickets introducing the whole scene.
Stardom triumphant indeed. And I love that violet line. Beautifully descriptive.
Love the vibrant colors as the sun bids us goodnight. A lovely haibun !
Thank you!
Beautifully described and written. Poetic. Romantic.
Thank you! And thanks for the follow.
Oh, I wait in anticipation of the unveiling of the night sky. Beautiful!
like someone already said, you’ve displayed a gorgeous painting; love how night brightens up, little by little, starting with a single star…’stardom triumphant’…wow…
Thank you!
After the colour imagery in your prose, that is a beautiful haiku – I love the idea of night taking over from day and triumphant stars!
Cricket SinGs
SonGs of starliT
Voice.. WinGs
oFF SinG
briGhten
lonEly fields
aS Night breaThes..
Rhythm.. beAT
and Song SinGs.. oN..
starliGht Cricket Bands..:)
Beautiful! Thanks.
SMiLes My
FriEnd..
Thanks
For the inspiration
And Welcome..:)
love the beat and the colors of this lovely poem! ❤
“Stardom triumphant.” I love that!
Oh. great! I see you really took your time to absorb it. What a nice concept, the night taking over the light. I like “violet wisps,” too.
Thank you Nan. Why didn’t you join us? The few haibun you’ve done before were really good.
All those amazing colours!!
I love the idea of the sun clocking off and handing the job over to the stars. I suppose the sun is a star, too. This is such a visual haibun, like reading a painting.
Thank you!
The colors and the way you give the light to night is spectacular… what a crescendo for stardom
I love how you present the stars in the night to us.
This is gorgeous. I especially like all the colors.