Noting Issa

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March 28, 2016 by petrujviljoen

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Ah! The neighbours have gone. Their Easter getaway is now over – for this year. All is quiet on the home front again.

Lying on the grass, now unremarked, looking up at the sky through the leaves of the fern tree, sparkling light reflects in the dewdrops still clinging – plenteous shade provided by the avocado at eight in the morning. No discernible breeze but some slight movement sets the fanned branches waving – to and fro.

A blossom, drifting, softly spiralling. Valediction – hail ye indolent one – from a far-flung shore. Unmet, yet recognition.

From where this blossom

Gracing morning’s first coffee –

Ah! dream of Issa.

…………………………..

Kanzen Sakura is hosting Haibun Monday at Dverse Poets this week. Provided are several haiku by Issa and Basho.  We must choose one to base our haibun on. This exercise is called hanami. I chose Issa’s:

“what a strange thing –
to be alive
beneath cherry blossoms”

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24 thoughts on “Noting Issa

  1. SMiLes.. mY friend.. then..
    iN a life full of distractions
    i made a Garden of the
    perimeters of mY yard
    bLocKinG out aLL
    distractions..
    and after
    decades
    of building
    iT.. finAlly i
    am Garden Free..:)

    Colors oF Y
    i
    faLL bloom..:)

  2. You set up a vivid scene of tranquility…where one can focus on those small but meaningful things like a blossom spiraling. Very nice.

  3. nmykel says:

    Yu swept me up and carried me right along in your slow-moving stream of consciousness. I enjoyed it mucho.

  4. From where this blossom
    Gracing morning’s first coffee

    One can’t help but wonder on the spectacle. Wonderful lines Petru!

    Hank

  5. A splendid depiction of this scene. Well done!

  6. Bryan Ens says:

    Your description of that blossom spiraling as it falls was beautiful.

  7. “Ah! dream of Issa” Wherever we are we can enjoy haiku. Very lovely work.

  8. Kathy says:

    I like the spontaneity of this…..the wonderment and joy of cherry blossoms.

  9. nmykel says:

    I don’t know what a “haibun” is and it’s not in my Webster’s Dictionary….Well, I just looked it up on Wiki and it seems anything can fit….

    • There’s much debate of what is haibun or haiku, in the English language. Haibun is basically prose with a haiku that results from the prose. Hope you enjoyed the write.

  10. Bodhirose says:

    Sounds so enjoyable when at last the neighbor’s are quiet and you’re alone with your reflections and a dream of Issa…wonderful.

  11. kanzensakura says:

    What a wonderful word for this – valediction. I love the thought of lying on the grass and seeing the first petal drifting down. And finding Issa in another land – I like this so much. Thank you for posting to the prompt.

  12. Those moments of quiet are to be valued aren’t they where you can be at peace in a peaceful spot taking stock of the world around you….

  13. What a lovely write–love that haiku, that dreaming of Issa!

  14. Grace says:

    A beautiful dream ~ I specially admire this part:

    A blossom, drifting, softly spiralling. Valediction – hail ye indolent one – from a far-flung shore. Unmet, yet recognition.

  15. I enjoyed your haibun, especially the second paragraph. It transported me, I could see myself lying on the grass, and could imagine the sense of spring.

  16. Mary says:

    I can hear the sigh of relief when all is quiet once again! And, alas, there is nothing like the first morning coffee!

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