Solitaire

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March 29, 2013 by petrujviljoen

Weekly writing challenge, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. This week’s photo is copyright to the hostess. The challenge is to write a 100-word fiction, based on the photograph. I enjoy constructive criticism so kindly (please) let me know what you think of this attempt.

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Solitaire

Everything in its place, expectant, waiting, begging disruption. The heart of the home in a corner of possible complexity. The lighted oil lamps an invitation.

Wedged heart with a view to a closed community. Devoid of movement. From this corner remotely controlling the virtuality of existence. Suspended activity, marking time.

Traces of being to be realised yet again within parenthesis of routine, the cue withheld. The shadows hold promise of past presences, memories accentuate absence.

Silence, like dust, collects on the table. Crumbs from the past feed nobody, nourishment becomes a wish. Patience becomes burden. Echoes will become mute.

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17 thoughts on “Solitaire

  1. Penny L Howe says:

    This is so very well done. Your story draws the reader right in where they need to be. I enjoyed your well written words!

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  2. Deep. Echoes are many.

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  3. Dear Petru,
    Love this line: “Crumbs from the past feeds nobody, nourishment becomes a wish” Although I think it should be feed…referring back to crumbs. Very nice piece. Poetic.
    shalom,
    Rochelle.

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    • petrujviljoen says:

      Thanks for the grammar correction. Haven’t had internet signal for a week, today back a bit. Have trouble loading my site so I could fix it. Got the pic for this week only this morning. Hope I can load the story. Thanks for liking my contribution.

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  4. Enigmatic, spooky and atmospheric writing which leaves a lot to the reader’s imagination. Ron

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  5. I’m not always a big fan of this sort of writing but I felt that you made it work well in this piece. Very poetic.

    janet

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  6. Oh! “Silence, like dust, collects on the table”. Very beautiful!

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  7. This lifts the 100 word fiction to litterature… Great work.

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  8. zookyworld says:

    I like your descriptions of this, felt like I was sitting in this kitchen and inhaling the quiet stillness around me. Your work made me think the house was a living thing, and it was tired of being so still, it lit the lamps as an invitation for another family to come in and make noise and disruption. You’ve created a touching work here.

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  9. A lot of complexity that stimulates the reader’s imagination.

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  10. N Filbert says:

    i’ve always liked the suggestiveness of fragments in short pieces. They sort of ask to be filled out by the reader. This worked that way – extending itself.

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I make art, I read a lot and I'm now trying to write as well. Otherwise I belong to a cat by the name of Charlie that drives me nuts sometimes and other times makes me melt with love for her.

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